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She reminds me that she's a dreamer

Her right hand delicately grips a pencil
as she's working equations on a TI-89 with her left
She looks up at me and smiles,
and there are stars, meteors,
spanning across the cosmos of her expression

her countenance reminds me to look up at the chalkboard
that's attempting to teach me how
to make verses sing from pages in a plain 8 by 11 notebook
and I am only armed with
a .7 pencil and a purple pen,
stolen from my older sister's pencil pouch

My hands are inches away from hers
from the desks side by side
like cars parallel parked on a side road
her equations confuse me

until she flips the page
and shows me stories
filled with metaphors of the sky
reminding me that we are both here for the same thing:
Writing.

I needed a reason to smile
She wanted a lesson in writing

She reminds me that I'm a dreamer

We exchange stories and poems like cigarettes
except the only price we pay is a small portion of our ego
when there are mistakes and flaws,
and we are graciously fragile people

I wrote poems of a boy whose touch I could never forget,
where I only slept because he promised me sweet dreams and good mornings  
Her stories were spun from meteors, magic spells,
and a payment of cucumbers

She teaches me that writing is a two-way street.

You walk down the road, expecting a revelation in the end,
but you don't find one
Instead, your find yourself armed with a notebook, a couple pencils
and blank pages  

She taught me to write my own endings with periods
so I sound like I can stand tall and proud,
not second guessing myself with an ellipsis at the end of my statements

I know that comma splices aren't the only thing that can cut sentences in two

She taught me that writing means to breathe
and the breath given to works of art comes back
in the form of satisfaction when you lay your pencil down  

You form callouses on your hands to take away those that are on your heart
You question how paper so thin can harbor so much weight
when all that's on them are words you're too afraid to speak
and remind yourself that you're a dreamer

I needed a reason to write.
She gave me one.

Thank you.
For a contest.
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Edit:
Holy shit. Best thing to wake up to is a bunch of favorites. Jesus.
Thank you everyone! Thank you, ~AdmiralSilv and ^NicSwaner! This means so much to me!
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Given 2013-04-25
Dreamers by ~Kupo9089 illustrates perfectly how writing can transcend into a complex relationship between two souls, explains the suggester. ( Suggested by AdmiralSilv and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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30stmLUVER Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This has been featured in my journal! I hope you like it! <333

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30stmLUVER Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
THIS is beautiful! Very inspirational <3 I love it!
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Jackcol Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
simply amazing ! :)
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The-Lighted-Soul Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful
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iinT3nT21 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Artist
This is amazing. Have you ever heard Kevin Coval speak?
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Kupo9089 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
I have to say that I haven't. Any recommended pieces? :)
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iinT3nT21 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Student Artist
I found a couple of his CDs online off of his blog, so here are my three favorite "albums."

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He came to speak at my school, and I got to see him twice, and both times I thought he was amazing. Listening to the audio again is so much less fulfilling than actually seeing him live.

Enjoy!
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Kupo9089 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
Oh dear.

This is lovely!

My favorite poets include Guante and Andrea Gibson.
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is Guante. He has so many resources for poets and for social justice in general.

Andrea Gibson's "The Last Poem I'll Ever Write"
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I hope you enjoy. :)
I know Guante through a friend, and he's a beautiful person. He has performed many times at my college.
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iinT3nT21 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Artist
Andrea Gibson's work is amazing.
"Love, a trap door of light. Even when it's gone, it's somewhere." Her poetry really speaks to me, and I could feel every word. I feel like I'm in her story every time she speaks.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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SaadHafeez Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Whoa . Made me Cry a little ! Superb . Favved .

Just plain Fantastic ! <3
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD! As a writer, of course I love and connect to this. It was beautifully written.
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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sccouture Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Wow. That was BEAUTIFUL! I wish I could write.
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Yorokobiii Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Totally loved it.
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darksonicsoul Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
This is so beautiful! As a writer I can really relate to this! Congrats on the DD by the way! :hug:
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rarmaster Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this was beautiful! As a writer, it really spoke to me. Wonderful poem.
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MidnightTiger8140 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very beautifully written. It brought a tear to my eye ^^"

Congratulations on the DD! You've certainly deserved it :)
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littlemoonboots Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
beautiful :heart:
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AshiharaLover Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome c:
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ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm speechless at the truth in this.
And as anyone who knows me can tell you, it takes quite a bit to make me speechless! :D

Congrats on the DD! :clap:

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moonsloth Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous. It really resonated
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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lollirotcat Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Student Writer
Love everything about this so much!! :heart:
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vanmall Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :happybounce:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
"the cosmos of her expression" - delightful.

Remember to go back and add punctuation to your poems when you are done with them. I used to get SO annoyed when people pointed this out to me, so I hope you'll forgive me for doing the same to you, but whilst you know what thoughts connect together, as a reader, I don't. This is my first time reading these thoughts side by side, and theres no way for me to know where one thought ends and one thought begins unless you tell me. These are your thoughts not mine.

I love the change in the 'she reminds me that I'm a dreamer'. Thats just lovely. A very thoughtful and skillful technique.

I love the callouses on the hands/ hearts. That is a very poignant and honest and therefore powerful statement which I fell in love with.

Overall this is a beautiful poem with beautiful language. It's sweet, happy and just charming. Thanks for sharing.

Congratulations on placing in The Magic of Memories Competition. Results here
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
I love it "you question how paper so thin can harbor so much weight" is my favorite line and sums up how I feel about this poem :D best of luck for the contest
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crystalline-skies Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
"You form callouses on your hands to take away those that are on your heart"
My favourite line! this is absolutely stunning, never stop writing :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Thanks for entering!
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